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[SalvageSV]

Here you go heres one of mine. I'm trying something really different with this one.

I like the little "play music" bump at the beginning, but I think the entire bit could have been sped up by abut 3X. You hold on the first shot (pre title) a bit long and then it takes a good while to get the volume up and then the "there we go." That could have all happened in about 3 sec and really worked to reel in the viewer.

As for the concept in general, I think it can work, but your version here isn't what I'd be interested in. If you kicked it off with rolling up the volume and then threw it into a montage of a group ride or something it would work much better. You're basically just showing a commute with music and occasional singing and it gets pretty boring. I was over it very quickly. You really need engaging visuals to pair with it to make the concept work.

The funny sing along stuff is not a bad idea. But it was too sparse and, like I mentioned, the footage you paired it with wasn't engaging.

I think others said the voice audio is rough and I agree. Too much bike and the voice is low and muffled.

There is also a drastic color/contrast mismatch between your two cameras. Some tweaking in post to the reverse angle could help create a more fluid transition between the two. Also, see my spot metering tutorial to get a more consistent exposure on that reverse camera.

 

[Viper1350]

Being American, I'm sure part of it is the accent that I'm not accustomed to,

I must admit, I had a chuckle at this

 

[SalvageSV]

Intro is nice and tight, which is good. But the shot of your vest and the slow text and slow footage doesn't help the tempo of the video IMO. Unless you want it to feel really laid back. That's what it's doing so do what you will with that info.

Not sure if it was on purpose, but I really like the cut at :50 that is timed with the visor move. It works and I appreciate that kind of thought in an edit. It's a pro move.

At 2:06 the exposure starts to drift due to the sunset. A little color tweaking in post would really help with that.

Random note ... at 2:36 I had my feet propped on my sub and could feel the idle of that bike in front. It was kinda fun. lol

This is a style thing that's very subjective, but I'm not sold on the constant rear cam being shown. It's better than just the front view, but it leaves you still with just the front view for your main content, jump cutting between shots. For a more exciting drive you could cut to it full screen more often, but I think using camera 2 for cuts to show more detail or to cover jump cuts works much better for a commute style video. The rear cam does work around the 2:55 mark with the other rider approaching, but otherwise it's just kinda taking screen space away from camera 1.

You should annotate your subscribe text at the end.

Overall, the edit was fairly tight and the content was engaging enough to keep my attention. You drew out a few parts a little more than I would have, but noting egregious.

 

[Viper1350]

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Intro is nice and tight, which is good. But the shot of your vest and the slow text and slow footage doesn't help the tempo of the video IMO. Unless you want it to feel really laid back. That's what it's doing so do what you will with that info.

I've been meaning to do a new intro, because of this exact reason. Your comment on it is more motivation for that

Not sure if it was on purpose, but I really like the cut at :50 that is timed with the visor move. It works and I appreciate that kind of thought in an edit. It's a pro move.

You're the first person to notice the visor cut

At 2:06 the exposure starts to drift due to the sunset. A little color tweaking in post would really help with that.

I've never done any kind of colour correction. Being colourblind is probably a factor too. I'll do some YouTube How To's on colour correction.

Random note ... at 2:36 I had my feet propped on my sub and could feel the idle of that bike in front. It was kinda fun. lol

I need to try this now...

This is a style thing that's very subjective, but I'm not sold on the constant rear cam being shown. It's better than just the front view, but it leaves you still with just the front view for your main content, jump cutting between shots. For a more exciting drive you could cut to it full screen more often, but I think using camera 2 for cuts to show more detail or to cover jump cuts works much better for a commute style video. The rear cam does work around the 2:55 mark with the other rider approaching, but otherwise it's just kinda taking screen space away from camera 1.

I hadn't thought of it this way and does give me some ideas. This will come in handy. THANK YOU!

You should annotate your subscribe text at the end.

Again, never thought of it. Good idea

Overall, the edit was fairly tight and the content was engaging enough to keep my attention. You drew out a few parts a little more than I would have, but noting egregious.

Thanks for the crit SV. It's much appreciated

 

[SalvageSV]

Critique request please!

Right off the bat, great topic to cover. Going topical on current events is a smart move.

The intro is really tight, and that's good.

Audio is really good. Super clear.

You've cut it to get rid of almost all of the dead space. that's great for an audio track, but can get distracting for the viewer with so many cuts. There are places where you have two words and then cut to three more. That's too much. Consider making a choice to leave a little dead space when it's short just to avoid excess cuts.

Or, what I sometimes do, separate the audio and video tracks and cut the audio out of sync with the video. By that I mean leave a solid, uncut video track and cut the audio multiple times underneath. Since we can't see your mouth there isn't usually a sync issue unless there is a loud sound that needs to sync with the bike, your hands or the environment. You could have avoided like 6 visual cuts in the first 15 seconds by using this trick.

Your cuts between topics (with the fade/title) are too tight. The transition is stepping on your words.

Your message is pretty solid, but I think you could have still cut some to distill it a bit. At 8 min you're creeping up on the "too long did not watch" area. You're under 10 which is good. But I think even 1 min off or getting just under the 7 min mark would get more views. And, based on what I heard, you could have cut it more and made that mark.

And a personal comment on the content, I'm with you. We get the same arguments in the US with the south hanging on to old BS ways wanting to secede from the union. Mainly states like Texas, Alabama, Georgia, etc. And so much of it is stepped in childish BS about "we wanna do what we want" and sprinkled with racist tones never let go after our civil was a hundred years ago.

 

[SalvageSV]

So, I just posted critiques of all of the videos posted so far. This is a look at what you'll get from me. I'm honest and I try to give solid advice and suggest solutions. I hope you all will do the same for me.

 

[Viper1350]

So, I just posted critiques of all of the videos posted so far. This is a look at what you'll get from me. I'm honest and I try to give solid advice and suggest solutions. I hope you all will do the same for me.

I value your critique. It's descriptive, honest and thorough. Thank you again SV

 

[Hypertard]

Right off the bat, great topic to cover. Going topical on current events is a smart move.

The intro is really tight, and that's good.

Audio is really good. Super clear.

You've cut it to get rid of almost all of the dead space. that's great for an audio track, but can get distracting for the viewer with so many cuts. There are places where you have two words and then cut to three more. That's too much. Consider making a choice to leave a little dead space when it's short just to avoid excess cuts.

Or, what I sometimes do, separate the audio and video tracks and cut the audio out of sync with the video. By that I mean leave a solid, uncut video track and cut the audio multiple times underneath. Since we can't see your mouth there isn't usually a sync issue unless there is a loud sound that needs to sync with the bike, your hands or the environment. You could have avoided like 6 visual cuts in the first 15 seconds by using this trick.

Your cuts between topics (with the fade/title) are too tight. The transition is stepping on your words.

Your message is pretty solid, but I think you could have still cut some to distill it a bit. At 8 min you're creeping up on the "too long did not watch" area. You're under 10 which is good. But I think even 1 min off or getting just under the 7 min mark would get more views. And, based on what I heard, you could have cut it more and made that mark.

And a personal comment on the content, I'm with you. We get the same arguments in the US with the south hanging on to old BS ways wanting to secede from the union. Mainly states like Texas, Alabama, Georgia, etc. And so much of it is stepped in childish BS about "we wanna do what we want" and sprinkled with racist tones never let go after our civil was a hundred years ago.

Thank you for the critique. Best one yet, im my opinion. So there we have it, a critique on a critique. Dare we go any deeper?

 

[Viper1350]

Everyone's a critique

 

[NS.YT]

Critique request please!

I actually liked this one, even with the quick cuts it didn't annoy me like those types of edits usually do. It kept me watching all the way through. I enjoyed it.

 

[Hypertard]

I actually liked this one, even with the quick cuts it didn't annoy me like those types of edits usually do. It kept me watching all the way through. I enjoyed it.

This had the quicket turn around of any video because it is such a big issue for us in the UK. I did it on the way home from work and published it the next morning. I do tend to rabbit on, so the editing has to be brutal or you guys will either lose the plot or disengage early. Again thank you for the feedback and I shall take everything on board. Anyone else feel free to post your movies for further feedback.

 

[NS.YT]

Okay, now I have a video for some criticism. I usually don't know what to do with these kind of random mash up videos and I'm never that proud to put them out. So I'm interested to see some feedback.

 

[Hypertard]

Unprivate it please.

 

[NS.YT]

Unprivate it please.

Should be good now

 

[Hypertard]

Good content, clear video and voice, good intro graphics sequence and timing but overall the video is too long. You can either cut it into two videos or cut out the silences and leave in the highlights.

 

[NS.YT]

Good content, clear video and voice, good intro graphics sequence and timing but overall the video is too long. You can either cut it into two videos or cut out the silences and leave in the highlights.

I have a real problem with being long winded. I did chop it down from 2 hours to 11 minutes lol. I'm gonna chop it some more I guess.

 

[Hypertard]

I have a real problem with being long winded. I did chop it down from 2 hours to 11 minutes lol. I'm gonna chop it some more I guess.

I think its been said before but new vloggers need to keep it short and sweet. Take the essence of what makes you, you and try and get it across youtube. This is coming from someone who can talk for his country.

 

[NS.YT]

I chopped it down by 4 minutes

 

[lupin]

@SalvageSV No matter what I do with this gopro it has the same problem when the sun is behind me.

I plan on swapping it for either a newer gopro or another drift before too long. Never buy a Hero 3 silver.

 

[NS.YT]

@SalvageSV No matter what I do with this gopro it has the same problem when the sun is behind me.

I plan on swapping it for either a newer gopro or another drift before too long. Never buy a Hero 3 silver.

Do you use the spot meter? It does a damn good job of bringing the sunlight to heel.