Not bad, I like how you handled the interaction with the other rider. The rest of the video was way too long winded to stay interesting. Mostly because you kept so much regular riding in there. If you removed most of it you would prob have a 7m video.
Your english is good and easy to listen to, but maybe plan out your sentences a little in advance so you can speak with confidence.
Other things you can probably do is to stop and show the bike properly when you talk about it. "Show, don't tell" is a good general rule.